JLSC INTRA-FORUM CONTEST #4

SONG CRITIQUES BY

JEREMY HAYNES

ARTIST & SONG

RANK
on 9

RATING

COMMENTS

01-Lee Alexander
Someday

2

8.5

Great vocal melody and guitar playing. Infectious hook that grows on you more and more with each spin.

02-Melina
Oedipus Rex

9

5.5

A little too Avant for my tastes. Very unique vocals which reminded me at times of Annie Haslam.

03-Joe Huettner
One More Mile

1

9

Really loved everything about this track except for the percussion which sounded a bit too "MIDI". Great performance all around, especially the vocals which remind me an awful lot of someone who for the life of me I can't put my finger on. This will surely haunt me for the rest of the evening, thanks for ruining my night man! ;)

04-Mike Tricker
Lifetime of Love

5

7.75

Fantastic piano playing on this one. Definately "felt" like one of those big ballads from a Disney film, but I kept waiting for the big hook. I'd love to hear the chorus developed a bit more! Good work...

05-David Tallent
Don't Run Away

8

6.75

Serious bass groove on this track, reminds me of a PFunk song. The multi-vocal effects detract a bit from what is otherwise a fun dance track.

06-Alex Calvo
Anaconda

7

7

Love the guitar melody line on this one Alex. I'd really like to hear this track complete with a rhythm section. The vocals are a bit buried in the mix with all of the effects. Overrall this is a really solid effort and would be a cool piece of a film score.

07-Nancy G. Brundrett
Lost and Found

4

8

You have a bit of a Grace Slick vibe to your vocal style in fact the song feels like an old Jefferson Airplane track. Lyircally this is one of the stronger entries in the competition, great job.

The song seemed to drag a bit towards the end and started feeling a bit flat. Would love to hear things changed up a bit with a key change, up tempo bridge etc.

Overrall this is a great entry!

08-Don Lyman
I Am Here

6

7.5

 This is an excellent rock track, I could hear the Eagles on this one. Loved the "break" at around 2:45... great instrumental work and production this as well.

09-Robert Field
What She Said

 

 

 

10-Jeremy Haynes
Piety and Greed

 

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11-Joro
Chasing Sunsets

3

8.25

Wonderfully descriptive lyrics and beautiful melody. Great job!

12-Hazelglow
Happy Just Being Here