JLSC INTRA-FORUM CONTEST #4
SONG CRITIQUES BY
08-DON LYMAN
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ARTIST & SONG |
RANK |
RATING |
COMMENTS |
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01-Lee Alexander |
4 |
8 |
Nice song. Good melody, nice chorus. Vocals sound very smooth. Good guitar work. The percussion sounds too far out front in the beginning of the song, but blends more into the mix as the song progresses. |
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02-Melina |
6 |
7 |
Melina, brave Melina, how noble an endeavor to put classical verse to music! Seriously, nice job. The MP3 kept rebuffering every few seconds, so it was hard to listen to, but I got the general idea. Your vocals sounded great. Not my genre, but thought you did a good job with a difficult task. |
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03-Joe Huettner |
3 |
8.5 |
Nice song, Joe. Upbeat, catchy tune. Nice lead vocals, but backing vocals sound strained in places. Other than that, it sounds pretty darn good. Keep up the good work. |
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04-Mike Tricker |
6 |
7 |
Nice song. Good piano work. I feel the melody/vocal performance could be stronger and more energetic, though. Also, the harmonies seem a bit out of tune with the melody line in places. Also, the echo effect sounds a bit strange, but that may just be the MP3. Overall, though, it's a very pretty love song. |
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05-David Tallent |
5 |
7.5 |
Fun song. Liked the beat (very danceable), instrumentation, vocals, and lyrics. But, it was hard to make out the lyrics. The vocals sounded great until the chorus. Need to keep the same vocal mix on the chorus as on the verses. Also, I think you should synch up the vocals on the chorus with the instrumentation, instead of singing in between the riffs. The vocals on the chorus would sound great if they were sung with the riffs. Good job overall. |
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06-Alex Calvo |
9 |
56 |
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07-Nancy G. Brundrett |
8 |
6.75 |
Nice melody and lyrics, but instrumentation needs to be louder -- kind of in background, hard to hear. Also, I would single track the voice -- the double tracking is somewhat distracting. You have a very pleasant voice though. |
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09-Robert Field |
9 |
6 |
Like lyrics/melody. Too much reverb on vocals. Also, vocals seem to go flat in places -- need more energy. Like piano, but may want to add some additional instrumentation. |
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10-Jeremy Haynes |
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Couldn't get it to play on my computer. Would play for a couple seconds, then stop, then a couple seconds, then stop, etc. Sorry! |
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11-Joro |
1 |
10 |
Wow. I think I'll stop writing songs and just listen to yours. Beautiful guitar work, smooth vocals, great lyrics --really captures what I think most of us feel playing sometimes. Nice harmonies too. Great job! |
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12-Hazelglow |
2 |
9 |
Nice song. Very smooth, melodic, and soothing. You have a nice voice. Could picture this in a film soundtrack behind a love scene montage -- couple walking playfully down the beach, etc. :) Horn section was a nice touch. My only criticism is that the vocals sometimes went a little flat at the ends of phrases. Otherwise, great job! |