Artist ~ Paul Ward
Song ~ "The night Paradise was lost"
Date posted ~ 27-Feb
Link ~ www.soundclick.com/paulward
Judge ~ Doogle
Score ~ 7
Comment ~ Critique – A grower and I like the way it builds to the chorus, could do with recording without
mistakes as this is where it lost marks for me.
Judge ~ Jim Hoye
Score ~ 4
Comment ~ Lyric rambles and goes nowhere - images not tied together - nice guitar -rhythm inconsistent -
hook doesn’t stand out
Judge ~ Bobbio
Score ~ 5
Comment ~ Critique: Long...good verses but chorus too similar
Judge ~ Tim Walton
Score ~ 5
Comment ~ Tough to get past the "1 take mistakes". A used $500 computer, a $50 software program
(Powertracks, for example), and a mic, and you've got yourself a 96 track recording studio! I
had a hard time following the story because of the production.
Judge ~ Mike
Score ~ 5
Comment ~ Kinda choppy with a bunch of mistakes that really distracted me from getting into this song.
Lyrics are interesting, like some of your other stuff better
Judge ~ Nancy G.
Score ~ 3
Comment ~ The introduction is weak. I feel your guitar sound is flat. I need to hear a flow,
but didn't. Voice is gentle sounding. Stopping and starting in a song makes it
sound incomplete. If you polish it up you would improve the song.
Judge ~ Tim Nemeth
Score ~ 7
Comment ~ I really liked this song, though the demo needs improvement...Great lyrics and vocals!
Judge ~ Melina/Christina
Score ~ 6.5
Comment ~ Critique: The song is quite allright, but suffers from a poor recording quality, with a lot of hiss
and the sound is improperly balanced. Also the performance is rather shaky. It has potential,
with improved vocals . The guitar is quite good, but needs more strength and precision, as it
sounds weak at times. A better performance and recording would boost it to a 7.5 easily.
Judge ~ Hazelglow
Score ~ 4.5
Comment ~ I’m afraid the jerky stop-start rhythm and mistakes and very distorted recording made listening
to this one really hard work. The last thing a ‘pop’ song contender in a contest should be is
hard work on the ears of the judge. As I said above already, it really distracts the listener and
makes it difficult to hear through to the potential of your song. Vastly better recording tools
are so cheap and accessible to everyone these days, and I can tell you certainly have the
musical ability and writing talent to make your song shine so much more if you put some
time/effort into developing that side of things. For a pop entry, the basic structure of your
song here needs to be less meandering and more concise.
[as for your photo - I almost took a point off ! Naw, just kidding…but you gotta find something
better than that cheesy uni graduation shot :-) ]